Proud Foot Words

I’m doing a final edit of my book before sending off for feedback. I’m working through, word by word, and this line from Landscape With Animals keeps entering my brain, day after day. I think it’s reminding me I need to do better.Sigh. ( Longer review here )

The air is dense with chatter, laughter, glass on glass, mosquitoes delicate as calligraphy.

Loc 212 Penguin ebook.

While I’m here, this is from the same paragraph:

He doesn’t love her, but he doesn’t want her loving anyone else. And he feels the pull of a string strong enough to easily hang a man.

Loc 212.