My favourite bit is the use of the parenthesis.

As he says it, he curses the child that he seems to drag around with him wherever he goes, and who always shoots his gob off at precisely the wrong moment, embarrassing the all-too-fragile construction of this grown-up Michael (watching). Surely she is wondering what on earth she is doing here with a baby face, on the verge of embarrassing tears.

The Time We Have Taken, Steven Carroll pg 42

Fourth estate 2007